Rod Sterling get's a taste of hot lead

Posted by Biohaz_Daddy on 2010/11/21 7:37:57
Your latest comic addiction is showing off what you learned from The Digital Man in good form. From a panel to panel, and layout perspective your story telling has improved quite a bit. I also have to compliment how all of the stylistic choices you made work very well together. While I think the busy, and hard, over kill of the rendered comic lines are a bit of a barrier to relate-ability, adding in the color scheme, font, and word balloon style makes for a cohesive design concept that work pretty damn good with the story's theme.

The story itself reads like someone kicked the Twilight Zone in the balls, and knifed it in the gut while it was down. It reminds me a lot of stories I would hear from my stepfather the cop, and his buds on the force. The dirty low trash world that is just on the fringes of where we live. Although yours has more of a happy ending lol

I think you are finding your story telling chops Pij, and you have an interesting vision that I find very engaging. Where I think you need to concentrate now is on the art side. For instance, the characters you created have sufficiently departed from the generic 3d model look, but the posing has not. The colors add to the story's emotional content, but for the lighting it is in only a few panels where it seems to have been designed with that in mind.

Overall I really enjoyed what you did here. The good far out weighed any short fall in my mind. And best of all the story had me jumping to the next page to see what was going to happen next. All in all a truly successful effort.

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