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Re: The Adventures of Obsidian Mask: The Starlet and the Liar 2

Subject: Re: The Adventures of Obsidian Mask: The Starlet and the Liar 2
by OzZy on 2018/7/25 14:58:10

You did it again! Another fantastic story with all the sci-fi and fantasy elements that I like to read.

If I may leave a couple sugestions:
Try to disable your orthographic corrector once you make a final grammar check. There are some minor words that have that wavy red underline that the corrector usually uses to sign an error.

And as much as I hate to hide any piece of your astouning art, please use less transparency on the word ballons as some of them are hard to read due to color blending with the image behind the ballon.

Other than that, I loved it and can't wait to see what will the next adventure.