I agree with the background being very unique in this. I like this version a lot.
Not just for the improvement in your technique, but also for the set up and configuration of the piece as a whole.
I like this sword better, but I don't know why I seem to like the placement in the original...I'm not sure. I can't explain it.
The alterations you have made are great, and placing her in this scene does indeed invite the viewer into the story.
Nice work.
As I said, I like it a lot.